Copywriters, I Really Do Need Your Help...

I just launched Attractor Genie – a brand new law of attraction software and I need to improve the copy.

http://www.attractorgenie.com

Please take a look at what I have done so far. It's the best my present skills can come up with.

I would be very grateful to receive any feedback on how it looks at present and what can be done to improve it.

I would also like to know if there's a problem with my copy, because the conversion rate is dropping.

As an incentive, I will give all the folks who take their valuable time to review my letter a free copy of my product($97 value)

Thanks in advance for your expert advice.
John Petrov

PS: After you post your comments please PM me - I will send you the download link . Thank you so much

Hello,

My criticism might seem a touch negative. However, to be quite honest , it is the same thing being repeated endlessly. In my defence, these kind of webpages immediately put me off.

The content itself is engaging in the first half and by the time you come to the middle, you just lose interest. The product itself I dont see as something tangible and even though there might be some people who may still buy this, I doubt that it is a life changing experience with your software. Definitely does not look like a 97$ value to me.

Its just too long, lot of unecessary information and does not leave anyone wanting more.

Sorry, it just did not work for me.

Positives : starts of very well. Connects to certain emotions in the beginning. Testimonials are good.

Just an advice : cut it short, its just too long.